What I would have become.

[SuwaHana]

Go for it! This story's wonderful! I'd love to read more; it's tons better than any of my stories.

[Little Brown Fox]

Hey, go for it. Do whatever makes you happy, and if you aren't happy with it, then do it over. Even if it turns out like crap, that doesn't seem to stop most people. And it's not the worst thing I've ever seen (though I wouldn't say I like it; it's disorganized, makes no sense, barely follows any sort of cohesive plot- and that's a stretch, and I couldn't tell that Denkou was supposed to be a dude until you said something).