I'll just put all my fanfiction with a direct link here in this thread (unless I write a long story with multiple chapters, then that will have a separate thread).
Today I finally got off my butt and wrote something (even though I was sitting at the time... hmm).
Here is the direct link for my story A New Upgrade which is about Atom discussing with his three best friends on how to better serve. This fic ties into the scenario of Atom getting an older body, this fic explains why he would ever want to do that.
Hope you guys enjoy. Tell me what you think.
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Sounds great! I'll read it once I get home. 
I joined this forum in late 2013 when I was 15 going on 16. Ignore my oldest posts, they embarrass me so much that I've considered permanantly leaving the forum more than once. I've grown out of my fangirling phase over Black Jack, Atom and Uran ages ago but the memories still embarrass me at times... 
Though, I try to be more open-minded about it and accept it as an "interesting stage of my life". 
Though, I try to be more open-minded about it and accept it as an "interesting stage of my life". -
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Wow.
I have no words to describe how amazing that was.
How you portrayed the characters was unbelievably....convincing. I could picture the whole thing in my head, like an anime video, while reading this. I bet Osamu Tezuka would have liked it if he understood English!
None of the canon characters are out-of-character here.
QUOTE):
A small girl wearing mostly pink was the one who answered the bell and she was all smiles. “Brother will be up in a minute, he's working with Reno on a project!” she said buoyantly as she led them into the air conditioned home. The three friends sighed almost in unison once they were inside. Chucking their shoes and backpacks they made their way to the couch and sat down, though Abercrombie melted down into the fathoms of gel infused memory foam and almost nodded off.
I could have drawn this into a comic panel. The way how you describe things is really good. It flows well, and everything pretty much makes sense - you're a really good writer! Hope to see Chapter Two real soon!
QUOTE):
“Thanks Uran” said the dark-skinned friend named Kennedy as he stretched out on the couch and crossed his legs lazily. “That would be great. I love the heat and all but this is ridiculous.”
A boy with glasses chuckled as he looked up from his phone, “It's a proven fact, climate change is still happening despite our efforts to curb pollution.” Abercrombie snorted awake.
Ah, yes. Here I can totally see the differences between the boys' traits from their actions. Great job on that! Keep up the good work!
Oh, and also: I haven't came across many fics in which Atom got a grown-up body that were really good yet except for perhaps AprilSeven's, but yours was good and the reason did make sense. I'm glad that Atom's character stayed true to what Tezuka had in mind, and that he didn't want to get an older body for a silly reason like in some fics I've seen. In one fic he wanted to do so because he fell for an OC, which was, in my opnion, very unoriginal.
I have no words to describe how amazing that was.
How you portrayed the characters was unbelievably....convincing. I could picture the whole thing in my head, like an anime video, while reading this. I bet Osamu Tezuka would have liked it if he understood English!
None of the canon characters are out-of-character here.
QUOTE):
A small girl wearing mostly pink was the one who answered the bell and she was all smiles. “Brother will be up in a minute, he's working with Reno on a project!” she said buoyantly as she led them into the air conditioned home. The three friends sighed almost in unison once they were inside. Chucking their shoes and backpacks they made their way to the couch and sat down, though Abercrombie melted down into the fathoms of gel infused memory foam and almost nodded off.
I could have drawn this into a comic panel. The way how you describe things is really good. It flows well, and everything pretty much makes sense - you're a really good writer! Hope to see Chapter Two real soon!
QUOTE):
“Thanks Uran” said the dark-skinned friend named Kennedy as he stretched out on the couch and crossed his legs lazily. “That would be great. I love the heat and all but this is ridiculous.”
A boy with glasses chuckled as he looked up from his phone, “It's a proven fact, climate change is still happening despite our efforts to curb pollution.” Abercrombie snorted awake.
Ah, yes. Here I can totally see the differences between the boys' traits from their actions. Great job on that! Keep up the good work!
Oh, and also: I haven't came across many fics in which Atom got a grown-up body that were really good yet except for perhaps AprilSeven's, but yours was good and the reason did make sense. I'm glad that Atom's character stayed true to what Tezuka had in mind, and that he didn't want to get an older body for a silly reason like in some fics I've seen. In one fic he wanted to do so because he fell for an OC, which was, in my opnion, very unoriginal.
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I joined this forum in late 2013 when I was 15 going on 16. Ignore my oldest posts, they embarrass me so much that I've considered permanantly leaving the forum more than once. I've grown out of my fangirling phase over Black Jack, Atom and Uran ages ago but the memories still embarrass me at times... Though, I try to be more open-minded about it and accept it as an "interesting stage of my life".
Though, I try to be more open-minded about it and accept it as an "interesting stage of my life". -
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